BELLA – 100 WC
“Here you go,” he says with pride.
“Why are you giving me this? It is your favourite,” I ask in confusion.
“ As you know you have been extremely helpful to me and I want to repay you by giving you this.”
“What is it? “
“ It’s a RAG. Nah just kidding it is a cloth but has gold in it,” he mutters.
As I grab the cloth it is soft and silky smooth, but I’m not sure if I want it, I want him to have it!
“I can’t.”
“What do you mean?”
“You should have it.”
But then … BOOM!
AMAZING BELLA! You really hooked me at the start. The ending was magnificent, I love it!
Great vocabulary and awesome descriptive words. I found it very funny when the man say – “It’s a RAG. Nah just kidding it is a cloth but it has gold in it”. AWESOME!
From Olivia W
Dear Bella,
I thought the way you put the prompt (The picture) into your story, and the descriptive language is great! Your story was very creative and fun to read!
From,
Eileen, Grade 5, Illinois, USA