ELLA’S ONLY JUST SEEN THEM!
Walking out of the Bond Cafe with a nice hot coffee in my hands is my morning routine before going to work.
Today was no exception, but something was different. As I walk out of the coffee shop I noticed something on the Eureka Skydeck. Eleven oversized golden bees are climbing up the wall. At the top there is a huge golden queen bee.
I stand and stare at it for a while with a couple of other people who have stopped to look.
I wonder how I did not see them putting the bees up onto the building
yesterday.
Dear Ella,
I love the view that you took on this picture. I like the way that you included the detail of the bees climbing the building. This really helped me visualize the essence of the bees. I wonder if the townspeople were scared. I sure would be if I saw the giant bees.
Your 5th grade friend,
Rahaf
Grade 5, Illinois
Dear rakau19
I really like the end of your story and how you wrote that you somehow did not notice them putting them up even though you g others everyday.
From,
Devin
Dear Ella,
I can really connect with the character, I miss a lot of construction happenings. I loved reading the story, and the way you used the picture realistically was great!
From,
Eileen, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Dear Ella,
Nice story! I like how the person in the story was having a normal day, when they suddenly see ginormous bees on the Eureka Skydeck! Keep it up!
Aidan, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
I like how you used good grammar and words that describe well.
From: Ben, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Very nice story. You made it flow very well. Great Job!
Great job Ella! I loved how you included how the main character has her morning routine! I also love the story.
Sincerely,
Diya, Grade 5, Illinois
I really liked your story. It would be scary to see huge bees climbing up a building. I would be scared and surprised. How about you?
Very nice story. You made it flow very well. Very nice Job!
Hi Ella!
I liked your story and I think it is really cool that you actually know where this is. In Illinois, I did not know. I can connect to the character because I would have been surprised if just one day I looked up and saw a bunch of bee sculptures on a skyscraper! Keep up the great work.
Sayonara! -Jimmy
Dear Ella,
I love your story! You did a great job on it, and your an amazing writer! I would be super scared if I saw giant bees like that. I like your name of the Bond Cafe! Great story!
Dear Ella,
I liked your 100 wc this week. It was very detailed when you described the bees you saw. Keep it up! You are a great writer!
I liked your story. I wished you added some more details to your story it was a little plain but other wise it was a good story. Keep up the good work.
Hello Ella
I really liked your story but I wish you had more stuff about the bees. Good job.
Dear Ella,
I like how you have large bees in your story towering over a place. One thing I’d say work on is you last sentence, make it more of a conclusion rather than ‘How did I not see this yesterday’ you build all this entertainment up to leave with a basic sentence. I’ve enjoyed your story though and how the queen bee was obviously represented.
Sincerely,
Brooklyn