OLIVIA’S DAD GOT PINGED!
It was finally time to leave for our trip to Queenstown, I was very excited and couldn’t wait until we got there.
We were half way through our trip when we took no notice of the sign and suddenly a cop car was tailing up behind us with their sirens on. My dad pulled the car over and the police car came up behind.
“Huh” my dad mumbled, “We can’t be in trouble! Surely not.”
The police walked up to the window and lifted his shades up then said, “You’ve been speeding”.
My dad huffed then got his wallet out.
OLIVIA – YEAR 8
Wow, it was very funny this and interesting! It is making me want to read more!
From Amelia
Thank you Amelia, I will continue writing more work like this but hopefully even better.
From Olivia
Hi Olivia,
The title is really funny which caused me to read more of the story. I would have thought the police knocked on the door, but not in your story. It’s really well thought through.
I liked how you described that there was a sign and you took no notice and it was really interesting where your dad got caught and was not happy about it.
Keep your good work up Olivia.
Hi Olivia
I really like the title of the story, it was very interesting and funny how your dad got caught and wasn’t very happy. I loved how you also used dialogue in your story.
From Caelin 👍😊