OLIVIA IS TRYING TO HELP.
As we stroll along the old cement bridge my friend notices something lying on the concrete and runs over to get it.
“Look”, he says, “Look what I found, it’s a gold locket”.
I simply nod my head then he looks over the edge of the bridge and leans slightly forward. Suddenly he slips and drops the locket and watches as it plops into the water.
I run over and whisper under my breath, “Hold on… tightly”.
“I’M TRYING TO HOLD ON,” he shouted back.
I grab his wrists firmly and pull him up.
“Phew, that was a close one”.
OLIVIA – YEAR 8
Dear Olivia,
I really liked your story! I wonder what the gold locket does, or is it just a pretty decoration? Maybe you could write a sequel explaining the locket!
Keep writing,
Jun
Grade 5,IL,USA
Thank you Jun, I guess you’ll have to find out in my next 100 WC.
Olivia,
Ashley School,
New Zealand.
Nice story!
I really liked how you used the prompt in such a great way that the story flowed smoothly. Keep it up!
Aidan, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Thanks so much Aidan for commenting on my 100 WC.
Olivia,
Ashley School,
New Zealand.
Very nice story!
I liked it, but when you used the prompt for it, I didn’t quite understood what was happening. I know its only 100 words so you probably couldn’t explain what was happening, but overall, it was a nice story and I liked reading it!