SOME WEIGHT LIFTING FOR LEWIS!
Prompt for this week: Banana Black Heavy Jumped Damaged
“5kg this is going to be easy,” I whispered to myself. I slowly bent down to grasp at the heavy banana coloured weights.
My thoughts got the better of me. As soon as I went for the first rep my sweaty hand slipped and the weight fell straight onto my black Adidas sneakers.
“OWWW!” I jumped repeatedly in agony.
I slid my shoes off in fear, revealing the grimmest bruise ever. It was as purple as blueberries, and as damaged as a one day delivery postage.
I started to think to myself, “am I really this much of an idiot?”
LEWIS – YEAR 8
Hey there Lewis,
I liked how you titled your 100 WC with alliteration, it entices the reader straight off the bat. I noticed that you got exactly 100 words and got all of the prompt words. Nice job. I liked how in the beginning you added some indirect characterization to give us some background information on your character. I really like how you added the prompt words, but they occurred naturally in the story. Overall I think you did a pretty good job and you hit all the marks that were required. Great job! I would love to see more of your work! If you have time I would appreciate it if you could leave a comment on one of my 100 WC’s on my blog: http://dogdays100.weebly.com/.
Thanks!
Aarav – Mrs. C’s Purple Group.