EMMA’S 100 WC THIS WEEK – FROM HOME!
Crash! Smack! Bang! All of the big, tall, creative and colourful statues smash together one by one like a gigantic set of dominoes. I run out of the way so I don’t get caught up in the middle of them all.
Soon as I got out, they were all smashed together in a big broken up mess.
Everyone heard the noise and immediately looked over in shock to see all the newest statues smashed to pieces.
Everyone just stared in silence at the hundreds of dollars broken on the ground. I was so confused because they had just been built.
Emma – Year 7
Emma,
My comment comes to your ‘FROM HOME’ writing FROM my HOME as well. I hope you are staying safe and healthy.
I like how you used onomatopoeia to start your piece. I could feel the narrator’s confusion at the end. Imagine being in their shoes?
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA