MAISY HAS IT ALL UNDER CONTROL
Crash!!
Dust circling the air.
Clambering out of bed as fast as I could still in a drowsy sleep, I find that a silver car is stuck in the roof of my house.
With the car swaying in the air I frantically start dialling the number for 111 to get some assistance as I have never been in this situation before.
As neighbours started surrounding my house wondering what was going on, I explained the situation to them. Help was on the way and I finally calmed down knowing that people were supporting me and the situation was being investigated.
MAISY = YEAR 8
This is an incredible story! I would have never thought of using the prompt in that way!
– Diya, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Amazing! Most of the other stories I’ve seen was with the narrator in the car but this time you are in the house.
Dear Olivia,
I love your story! Your sentence structure wasn’t exactly as I would have done it, but that’s what makes it so exciting! The way you used the prompt and your own creativity was amazing!
From,
Eileen, Grade 5, Illinois, USA,
Dear Maisy,
Great work. You did a nice job developing an interesting event.
Sincerely, Julia
Dear Maisy,
Amazing story this week. I love how you created a interesting plot and mixed it with overwhelming creativity. I would never have thought of writing a story about this prompt with me being in the house when the car crashed. I also like how you explain your feelings during the story. Great Job.
Stay Heathy,
Caiden, Grade 5, Illinois
Hey Maisy, this story was so wonderful. I love the way you described the incident and how you substituted overused words such as help and used assistance. This writing piece was spectacular, keep writing!
-Lily, Grade 5, Illinois
Nice story. Very creative and enjoyable. Also, I find it pretty interesting. Nice job.
Hi Maisy,
I enjoyed reading your story from the perspective of someone living in the house when the incident occurred.
Great use of words, such as ‘clambering’ and ‘ frantically’ to add detail.
Well done!
Michelle, Team 100wc
Melbourne, Australia