OLIVIA REMAINS COOL AND CALM.
It’s a Saturday afternoon party, the sun is beaming on us, and the grass lush and green, everything in my friends garden looks well-cared for.
Someone taps me on the shoulder and passes me a vermilion red cup. I take a swig of the sloshing liquid, the sour lemon taste tingles my tongue, but it’s cold and traditional. I close my eyes, then suddenly – – – CRASH!
I flutter my eyes open and gape at the sight of a car which has gone through a house across the road! Everyone bolts over, I sit, relax and continue to sip my fresh lemonade.
OLIVIA – YEAR 8
Wow Olivia! This is so creative and incorporates the prompt amazingly!
– Diya, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Amazing job Olivia! It was a sad story butI loved the dramatic and suspense feel that it gave me while reading!
Dear Olivia,
This was a very interesting 100WC post! You incorporated the prompt very well in your writing, and it was very interesting how you stayed calm, while drinking the lemonade while others didn’t. This story was in extremely great detail. Why did the lemonade calm you? Was it the cup? The taste? Why were you calm?
From,
Dylan
Dear Olivia,
Nice story. It was funny but kinda sad for me both at the same time. I also liked how you said you just sipped the lemonade.
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Dear Olivia,
I love your story! When reading stories, I find it most interesting when something mysterious is going on; for example, the mysterious lemonade a stranger handed you. The story is full of description, and overall, it was fantastic. Keep writing!
Nicholas, Grade 5, Illinois, USA