TAIDGH’S DAY STARTED OUT QUITE CALMLY!
I awoke to three little birds chirping on the windowsill. I stepped outside with my coffee in hand, I look up to the sky as it starts to become dark and cloudy.
As I sit down on my leather couch I start to hear a sound like a car, I hopped up and walked outside I looked around but saw nothing.
As I was walking inside I heard the sound again, suddenly an old grey car comes out of nowhere and smashed right through the stone wall, the car sped up the stairs and got stuck in the white ceiling…
TAIDGH = YEAR 7
Taidgh your story started off so quietly and peacefully, then it all went to custard! You have been working hard on your writing and the 100WC is a good way to keep up with that learning. Remember one of the key things is to work with strong vocabulary, and the use of really good linking words and phrases. I really liked the use of ‘As I was walking…’ Some other good links are BECAUSE; WHILE; AT THE SAME TIME; DURING; AT THAT MOMENT…
Keep up the good effort Taidgh!
Ms M #100WC