CIARA CHOSE: …we disappear into the night…
Prompt: …we disappear into the night –
Drops of rain beat against my skin like tiny hammers, my feet slip outwards on the wet autumn leaves as I round the corner with speed.
The cold night air shocks my throat and lungs as I inhale deeper and faster. With each step, immense pain shoots through my ankle to my knee, they are following me!
I wipe the sweat from my forehead, exhausted. My heart starts racing. I know I have to keep going, they are getting closer, I can smell them. They smell like strong smoky ashes.
We disappear into the night, still in an intense pursuit.
CIARA – YEAR 8
But what is chasing you?? You have set the scene really well and created a sense of suspense and the fear that the author is feeling. Great emotive writing.
What a fantastic piece of writing, I am so impressed. I loved your use of adjectives and descriptions. Well done!