HERE’S JOEL’S 100WC.
My friend Mike and his family bought a wonderful new house and invited me over for a weekend sleepover.
While we are outside having fun on the huge trampoline, we heard deafening screams that echoed through the cold night. When we rushed inside to tell Mike’s parents, they were nowhere to be seen!
“This is pretty spooky,” Mike mumbled.
“Very, in fact I think we should call the cops now,” I reply.
Mike rushed to the phone and rang the local police. Luckily they got here super quickly, ready to taser a shadowy character as it smashed through the patio wall.
JOEL – YEAR 6
It was a very detailed story, and the wording kind of made the reader a bit nervous about what might happen. It was good how they’re reactions were realistic, like running inside.