RYAN WAS NEVER SEEN AGAIN!
We were never seen again.
One afternoon my Mum decided to go for a drive.
We headed north through the Ashley Forest. We travelled through the pine plantation and then high in the clouds with beech forest surrounding us.
After a while we dropped down into a valley, driving through fords surrounded by cattle as darkness set in. I was scared. Where were we?
Just off the track was an outline of a shepherds hut. We made our way inside. It was cold and musty. I was terrified as the deafening screams echoed through the cold night. What was it?
We were never seen again!
RYAN – YEAR 8
Dear Ryan,
I love your story! It is so different than the ones I’ve seen, and it’s great! Keep up the good work!
From,
Eileen, Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Dear Ryan,
I like the story that you wrote for this week. The story has good description. As well as your grammar.
Devi,
Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Dear Ryan,
Your story was very descriptive, so descriptive that I could actually picture the whole scenario in my head. I loved this story so much, and it definitely was written by a very amazing and creative author(you). Thanks for sharing this wonderful story with me, and don’t forget to keep writing!
Lily,
Grade 5, Illinois, USA
Dear Ryan,
Fantastic story! Your descriptive words made me feel like I was in the hut with you, panicking as I hear the screams. Your story had a really nice flow, so I didn’t have to stop and ask “Wait, what did that say?” Overall, amazing job this week! Keep writing!
Nicholas, Grade 5, Illinois USA
Dear Ryan,
Wow! Really nice story! You used descriptive language and words to make the story feel real. You don’t have any grammar mistakes , and your story has a really nice flow. Nice job!
Stay Healthy,
Caiden, Grade 5, IL, USA
Hi Ryan
I really liked your story and it was so descriptive that I could almost imagine every bit of it. It made me want to read more.
Joe YR 7 Ashley School.