TUSHIL AND THE TUNNEL.
Yesterday I was in the forest, when I stumbled upon a dark tunnel that seemed to have a light at the bottom. Without hesitation, I wandered down the tunnel and found that the light was a lamp.
At the bottom of the tunnel there was an area that had metal walls. This was starting to creep me out but I convinced myself to keep going. Then I heard a creaking noise and saw a pair of red eyes.
That’s when I knew I should run. I sprinted out of the tunnel and woke up. It was just a bad dream.
TUSHIL = YEAR 6
Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Tushil. You could have left your story as a cliffhanger, instead of a dream. There is a strength to your story, created by the use of precise and interesting vocabulary to create tension, and by the variety of sentence beginnings you chose. Thank you for your accurate punctuation, which makes your text easy to read. I hope I can read more of your writing.