HERE IS JOEL’S 100 WORD CHALLENGE
Excitedly I arrived at Palm Island to hopefully discover the lost treasure of music. Before I adventure out exploring I decide to have a refreshing swim.
“Help!” I yell. “I’m getting sucked down.”
Too late, I’m propelled through time and wake in a cave. Curiously I search around and find an ancient chest.
“Could this be the lost treasure?”
With a huge rock I shatter the shiny lock.
“Wow, the gold viola!”
While I’m examining the viola a goblin dances in playing a flute. In a trance I magically begin to play.
“You are under my power, dance with me!”
JOEL – YEAR 6
What an imaginative story, Joel. There is plenty of action in your 100 words and lots of speech. This makes it all come alive. I particularly like the phrase ‘In a trance I magically begin to play’. It is all very exciting and I am left wondering what happened next?