LACHLAN’S FANTASTIC STORY OF THE ELEPHANT.
The noise echoed through the savannah, the sound of the elephant calling all the animals and different creatures. You see, a problem had arisen.
Due to them being in lockdown, the creatures hadn’t been able to get out and about. This meant that the creatures hadn’t been able to catch up with what had been happening around the place, so the elephant had called a meeting for every animal in the savannah.
Once everyone was seated and the noise had started to die down, the elephant cleared his throat, puffed out his enormous chest… then the elephant delivered his speech.
LACHLAN – YEAR 8
Hello Lachlan, awesome story, first I like the way that you used the word arisen. Also you used a lot of description about the elephant and that was very good. Maybe next time you could say what animals the elephant assembled to talk to because some animals don’t live in the Savannah but it was a very good story. Come read my story at: https://evan567mps.edublogs.org/2020/06/20/the-rover/
Hello Lachlan. Its a really cool story. I loved the way you were talking about the Lockdown and that the creatures hadn’t been able to catch up. One wish is that you should replace animals because its a bit repetitive but everything else is great. Come and read my story if you wish:https://lachlan567mps.edublogs.org/2020/06/20/elephant-and-jingle-a-bazooie-and-kanjo-story/