A TSUNAMI IN AUCKLAND = BY LACHLAN
It was just a normal Saturday in Auckland. Nothing particularly strange had happened, but then it began.
The siren wailed across the city screaming at us to retreat. This siren wasn’t heard often but everyone knew what it was… The tsunami siren.
Women and children screamed, people scrambled in all directions trying to escape and get away from the beach as the giant wave swept across the harbour towards the city, threatening to swallow and demolish anything in its path.
We had no chance. The closest high ground was 30 minutes away by car this wave was surely our doom.
LACHLAN = YEAR 8
Hello Lachlan, this is an amazing story that really captures the tension of such an event. I particularly like how you included, “The siren wailed…”. I was able to clearly hear it continually whilst reading your story. Your description was really good also. Whilst you didn’t give us a happy ending, I think your decision to leave it open ended worked well. Well done.
Hello Lachlan, This is a very exciting and well thought out piece of writing. I can just imagine what is happening, you have added distinctive adjectives which really brings the story alive. I also love how you have said “this wave was surely our doom” you really lead me on and I am really hoping there will be more to this story in the future.
-Deacon