100 WC AT THE ICE SKATING RINK, BY IZAAC
Screech! My Ice skates tear up the FROZEN WATER beneath me, the lights make the ice glimmer below me causing my STRIPED t-shirt to light up.
The squeaky RUBBER in my shoes was rubbing on my foot causing it to blister and hurt.
“Attention, attention!” the host booms through the speakers, “we are going to play a game on the ice. It’s called spin the bottle.”
“Yay,” I whisper to myself.
BANG! The bottle hits the ice… round and round and round the bottle went.
YES! It landed on me. I got a pulse through my body and got EXCITED.
IZAAC – YEAR 6
Well done for getting all the prompt words in to your story so well, Izaac. They were a tough set this week! Lots of excellent description in your story, bringing it to life. I particularly like ‘a pulse through my body’ and ‘the host booms through the speakers’. I can really feel the action.
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Hello! Great story. From the very beginning I was engaged in your story. I could hear it, I could feel it. You took me right to the ice rink. You have used language accurately and effectively. Super effort.