TERROR IN THE STORM FOR MAISY.
Thunder roared and lightning flashed inside the house, everyone scattered away to their bedrooms. The storm kept getting worse but no one was budging.
In one particular room my dad stood, he wasn’t afraid of this raging storm, he was calm and collected.
Crash! A slate of wood was jolted off the wall of his bedroom. Now he was thinking.
“ Strange as this may be, and as much as I want to investigate, I can’t. But I had to see what was inside.”
What lurked inside looked gold and expensive, what he unveiled next was not what he had anticipated.
MAISY = YEAR 8
Hello Maisy,
Your story is the beginning of a great adventure. Lightning and thunder increasing, people scared and hiding in their bedrooms with a brave dad making a discovery. You made good use of the prompt. Well done.
If you were to continue your story, I wonder what the gold and expensive object might be? Would it be good or something evil? There is also an unanticipated discovery. Your beginning could lead in many directions.
Keep writing. People with good imaginations should share their adventures.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia