ALEX HAD AN A-HA MOMENT!
I entered the ancient palace, looking for the lost gold my great-great grandad had been searching for.
As I searched the palace, I entered the creepiest room I had ever seen in my life.It freaked me out as much as my worst nightmare. There was a massive chandelier that had green lights like the green sphere on the table. Then I asked the sphere, where is the gold?
Instead of telling me or showing me, it presented me a viola that I thought looked similar to a violin. Then I realised – the gold must be hidden inside the viola . . .
ALEX – YEAR 7
To Alex, I like the hook you have on your 100WC. The part in your 100WC that I like is the part were you said “the gold must be hidden inside the viola” that is very interesting way to finish your 100WC. In my opinion I would add some metaphors and more descriptive language .